Writing marketing blurb without faking it

As you might have seen I tend to write in a very rambling mode, with probably one too many semantical and grammatical errors. Now is the time to tighten up the front page of WideWord to help sell the service. I need it to show some of the main features without being pretentious and fake in the typical marketing style.

So I’ve made my first attempt and put it live. I would really appreciate comments either here or privately to pelle@neubia.com. I received lots of great feed back on the WideWord User Agreement which really helped me out.